"Well cardboard you should really show some ownership and pick up your cardboard!," said Trash.
"Sorry trash, at least I don't get trash thrown at me!"
"Calm down voice it's almost your guises shift.," said plastic. calm down voice it's almost your guises shift." The two different wastes went to the beach to clean up and…
"Ow!"
"Are you OK trash?," asked Cardboard.
" just leave me alone." said Trash laying on the ground. Cardboard apologize for what he had said earlier because he realize saying mean things don't help either one of them. Afterwards they became best clean up buddies.
You have to add capitals and there are some periods that don't need to be there. Also your'e story is a bit confusing.
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You have a good story. Remember when you have a period at the end of a sentence, you don't need a comma after the period. Also, when you said "Calm down voice it's almost you guises shift." I am a little confused because I'm not to sure I understand what your saying. Also, you added that line 2 times in your story. Also remember that after a period it is just one space but you added more then 1 space. Good story, but read it out loud to catch mistakes.
ReplyDeleteIn cardboard is a name, then it should be capitalized. Also you should put a comma in after "Well cardboard". You repeated a sentence, and I don't understand the part about the guises. You are missing a couple capitals and there's an extra period in there. You might want to work on making your story a bit more clear.
ReplyDeleteMake sure to capitalize the first letter of all the character's name's. Also, you don't need a comma after someone is done speaking. The part when it says"Calm down voice it's almost you guises shift. I was a little bit confused on what you were saying so maybe you could make it a little bit clearer so the reader understands what you are saying. Also, you need to replace the word 'realize with 'realized' because the character realized it. Good story though.
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